In response to a blog post from a fellow writer (on my imuafilm blogroll under Poetic MindState), I want to ‘write back’ on the same theme. I admire the sincerity of the post and the emotional honesty it took to express the pain this author feels, about life and death, and some heartbreak and disillusionment thrown in, for good measure.
http://tjefferson85.com/2009/12/11/after-death
So here is my first draft response to his poem, “After Death.”
Post-Mortem MemorandumWhen it’s over,
said and done,
I want to be laid to rest in a
dress
and some pretty shoes
throw a flower in
or a bouquet of wildflowers
wrapped in a strand of horsehair
These things I want to remember.
Take me up to heaven on
a great big clipper ship
a fast ride away from here
with its poverty and barefooted silent
shuffling woman I haven’t seen for months
And yet, that doesn’t mean anything.
Earth can be hell frozen over
if there is such a thing
it feels like we are
about to find out
I want to find out
what was that for?
That land of loss and pain and suffering
more than enough
for all
yet carried by a few.
The earth, behind, and
the thought of heaven
ahead,
in the ground of this
place we now walk on.
Nice blog, I like it’s theme.
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Thank you so much! Looking for you now…
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Oh I am so glad you read it! Thank you! I really like your work, and this, I guess, is what it is all about — to share the distress of the muse!
Thanks and may peace and goodwill be yours this holiday season.
We will be in touch!
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This is a great response, i see you have the same emotional distress in your rendition! I’m happy and humbled that i could inspire this great work!
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